Hello readers,
This blog is my writing i have been working on since Wednesday.
I hope you find it entertaining.
I was going to my nana's house on a scooter and then a zombie came up to me and I said ‘’Sir are you ok? Sir sir can you hear me’’. He tried to bite me so I got a baseball bat and hit him across the face, just in case I hit him two more times. I went as fast as I could to my nana's house when I arrived my nana wasn't there, only the dogs rocko and tonek rocko was a great guard dog but tonek was small and old. And then I saw 9 zombies in the backyard. My nana had a hunting rifle so i picked it up, I had a backpack so I stored ammo meds and food. I shot the zombies one by one, I then stole my aunties car but she wasn’t home either. I drove to a gun and weapon store the receptionist was still alive and not a zombie because he owned many weapons. I went inside the store very silently I stole a suppressor so the zombies couldn't hear my shots, I then realized that the receptionist was my friend James. ‘’James is that you man’’ ‘’Casper what the heck you're alive!!?? ‘’Heck yeah bro’’ the two survivors went to a clothing store to buy leather jackets and strong boots. There was 19
Zombies outside the store so we went full john wick on the zombies, after that me and james found an armored truck with guns in the trunk. Me and james stole the truck and went my house to make sure my family were ok but no one was home,
Thank you for reading my blog.
WOW Casper...your story was FULL ON.There was so much happening.
ReplyDeleteI'm not a big fan of people using guns or shooting people.
I did enjoy seeing your use of punctuation.You included speech marks,full stops and capital letters.WELL DONE.
Just remember that when we write the word 'I' it needs to be a capital one.
Hello Casper it is me James. I like your story I could picture it in my head and it really flowed. Next time maybe put paragraphs in your story. See you again bye.
ReplyDeleteHello James. Thank you for giving me feedback i will improve next time.
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